{"content":{"sharePage":{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"31599009","dateCreated":"1292181893","smartDate":"Dec 12, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Brandonkuhl","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Brandonkuhl","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/pphsenglish332.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/31599009"},"dateDigested":1532172922,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Criticism","description":"You did a great job of summarizing this.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"31575905","dateCreated":"1292088617","smartDate":"Dec 11, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"katielewis48","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/katielewis48","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1291748882\/katielewis48-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/pphsenglish332.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/31575905"},"dateDigested":1532172922,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"criticism","description":"I think you did a nice job with this essay over all. I think at times it was kind of hard to follow, but overall good. I think you should put more spacing between your paragraphs, so that the reader knows the difference, and that way they will not all flow together.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"31573655","dateCreated":"1292081500","smartDate":"Dec 11, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"boxed_moonlight","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/boxed_moonlight","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/pphsenglish332.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/31573655"},"dateDigested":1532172922,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Criticism","description":"There were a few things I thought you might be able to improve about this essay.  Instead of focusing on retelling the story, you might want to focus your space on explaining in more depth the meaning of the events of the story.  Also, you might want to proofread your essay for errors, as I spotted a few in reading it.  Along with that, if you could, I would suggest trying to reformat the page so that you have spaces between the paragraphs, as it was slightly difficult to distinguish between them.  Making the font of the page uniform throughout would also be a good idea.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"31568835","dateCreated":"1292044712","smartDate":"Dec 10, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Reddawn333","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Reddawn333","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/pphsenglish332.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/31568835"},"dateDigested":1532172922,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Criticism","description":"Some good things and some bad things about this essay.  Overall it's good, support works, and the intro paragraph is solid.  The cons are the fluidity of then essay though.  The points all seem kind of out there and not linked together very well.  Overall good though.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"31568125","dateCreated":"1292041108","smartDate":"Dec 10, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"c.shaw","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/c.shaw","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/pphsenglish332.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/31568125"},"dateDigested":1532172922,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Criticism","description":"Your essay was pretty good. You may want to put some better transitions in it, and proofread it one more time.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"31565715","dateCreated":"1292034154","smartDate":"Dec 10, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"commandercool784","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/commandercool784","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/pphsenglish332.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/31565715"},"dateDigested":1532172922,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Criticism","description":"I thought that this was an excellent essay.  I think you did a great job with support, because you did have many difference sources that really can bring all of the ideas together.  Good stuff.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"31563535","dateCreated":"1292029289","smartDate":"Dec 10, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"bnix21","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/bnix21","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/pphsenglish332.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/31563535"},"dateDigested":1532172922,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Criticism","description":"This is analysis is long, but it is filled with good points and facts so its a good thing. I liked how you pointed out the comparision between Poe's life and the development of the story. Good job.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"31525505","dateCreated":"1291993599","smartDate":"Dec 10, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"jaromager34","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/jaromager34","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/pphsenglish332.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/31525505"},"dateDigested":1532172923,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Criticism ","description":"I agree with the others that the transitions could flow more smoothly. I think it would help if you also cut a bit of the excess information and added a few more specific facts to help prove your main points. Also, the thesis is good in that it is specific and detail, but I think it needs to be reworded in order to flow more smoothly. Good job though!","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"31523899","dateCreated":"1291992779","smartDate":"Dec 10, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"ryan.barnes","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/ryan.barnes","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/pphsenglish332.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/31523899"},"dateDigested":1532172923,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Criticism","description":"The biggest "mistake" in this is that some of it is weird in the way it flows.  It was well thought-out, but the support seemed slightly lacking.  Other than that, you did a good job of answering the prompt.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"31523229","dateCreated":"1291992352","smartDate":"Dec 10, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"trackkt7213","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/trackkt7213","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1292267488\/trackkt7213-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/pphsenglish332.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/31523229"},"dateDigested":1532172923,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Criticism","description":"I thought you made some very good points throughout the essay, but the transitions weren't as clear as they could be. I sometimes found it difficult to try and see where you were coming from. Also, the quotes were a nice touch, but maybe elaborate on them a little bit more to their tie in to the story?","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]}],"more":true},"comments":[]},"http":{"code":200,"status":"OK"},"redirectUrl":null,"javascript":null,"notices":{"warning":[],"error":[],"info":[],"success":[]}}