{"content":{"sharePage":{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"31575233","dateCreated":"1292086517","smartDate":"Dec 11, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"leannehahn","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/leannehahn","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/pphsenglish332.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/31575233"},"dateDigested":1532172733,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Criticism ","description":"I thought your essay was very good!  You used "I think" a lot though which is probably unnecessary because the reader already expects your opinion, but other than that well done!","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"31571929","dateCreated":"1292073757","smartDate":"Dec 11, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"thad1","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/thad1","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1291864811\/thad1-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/pphsenglish332.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/31571929"},"dateDigested":1532172733,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Criticism","description":"The support is just fine. What many of us would recommend is for you to change your first-person style of writing into a third-person style of writing. Also, make sure to restate your thesis statement in the first sentence of the last paragraph.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"31568907","dateCreated":"1292045055","smartDate":"Dec 10, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Reddawn333","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Reddawn333","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/pphsenglish332.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/31568907"},"dateDigested":1532172733,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Criticism","description":"Beating a dead horse here, but avoid using I.  Opening paragraph was alright but could use some polish.  Everything else was really good though and overall it was a great essay.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"31568215","dateCreated":"1292041485","smartDate":"Dec 10, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"c.shaw","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/c.shaw","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/pphsenglish332.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/31568215"},"dateDigested":1532172733,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Criticism","description":"Pretty good. Make sure you do not use the work "I", so you may want to proofread it again one more time.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"31561765","dateCreated":"1292025720","smartDate":"Dec 10, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"mattvermee","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/mattvermee","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/pphsenglish332.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/31561765"},"dateDigested":1532172733,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Criticism","description":"Like Maddy and Paige, you should not use the word I in your essays. It was very well written other than that. Try to make the phrases where you said I think into more factual statements and I feel you would really convey your points much better!","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"31559523","dateCreated":"1292021854","smartDate":"Dec 10, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Oschwald17","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Oschwald17","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/pphsenglish332.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/31559523"},"dateDigested":1532172733,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Critism","description":"You need to be confident in your work. You used the phrase "I think" a lot. You should not use personal pronouns while writing essay's. You had good support, you just need a way of saying it with confidence.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"31506775","dateCreated":"1291949111","smartDate":"Dec 9, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"PaigeG24","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/PaigeG24","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/pphsenglish332.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/31506775"},"dateDigested":1532172733,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Criticism","description":"I think that you did a pretty good job, but you used "I" a lot.  Langley said we should try to refrain from that, so just a heads up.  If you were to reword some of it, I think your essay would be more legit!","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]}],"more":false},"comments":[]},"http":{"code":200,"status":"OK"},"redirectUrl":null,"javascript":null,"notices":{"warning":[],"error":[],"info":[],"success":[]}}